Writing Challenge: day 27

Posted on July 3, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

pool at the Underwater Swimmer School circa 1954

On my second day of day 5 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge, I moved on to the next two areas to find details in your stories’ setting. They are senses and dress. For an exercise I decided to pick a scene and list things I imagined would be there. I picked the first day the students get into the swimming pool. Here is what I wrote:

2 – Senses

Sights: clear blue sky, bright sun, flat horizon, water on the cement deck, slightly nervous men, calm water of the empty pool, low single story building with high square windows the wide flat trim and a deep overhanging roof with thin metal polls supporting it painted in white, two shaped metal bars where the ladder to get into the pool is, surrounding buildings; three-story building with uniform windows, a large grass area with huge banks of lights, shade area made by a simple roof with thick white post along one side of the pool, some benches.

Sounds: honking cars, gurgle of the pool drains, nervous shuffling of a few feet, deep authoritative voice of the instructor, thud of equipment bumping against body parts, the splash as the first student steps off into the pool in full gear.

Smells: chlorine, wet cement, nervous sweat, salt on the breeze

Taste: salty sweat, chemical clean on the mouth piece

Feel: the rough surface of the cement deck on bare feet, the solid weight of the air tanks, the feel of the regulator in your mouth, anticipation of what temperature the water will be, butterflies in the pit of your stomach

3 – Dress

Basic swimming trunks of khaki fabric with clinching belt-like contraption in the front to adjust the fit. One instructors wearing simple hat with a bill in the front. Air tanks, face mask, hoses and mouthpiece with regulator, stiff rubber flippers

Writing Challenge: day 26

Posted on July 2, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

Moving on to day 5 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge! Today’s focus on the details of the setting for the story. There always seems to be more research to do. This is an ongoing learning experience. Lynn list 9 areas of opportunity to add setting details. The first one is history. This includes world, regional and local events. As I reviewed some of my earlier historical data, I noticed that Roger Bannister’s sub-four minute mile was in 1954. I wonder if there is a connection between that and the story I shared last week of some of my Dad’s coworkers and running a mile course.

Finding local Key West history for 1954 to 1957 has been more challenging but I’m gradually adding to my knowledge and understanding. It is good to have a string on days completing my challenge goals behind me again. Onward, I go. I may be slow but I am moving. I can see that Day 5 is going to take me a while to get through.

Writing Challenge: day 25

Posted on July 1, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

I’ve finally finished day 4 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. Kind of amazing that it has taken me 25 days to complete 4 days. But I’m still moving forward and with pretty good consistency and that is my goal. I pulled together the photos above as reference images while I’m writing. I printed it for easy reference. The top photo is of all the instructors at the Underwater Swimmers School. The middle left is my Dad directing students. I think this is a posed photo because I just don’t see my Dad acting all bossy like that. I’ll have to ask him. The middle right is an official Navy photo from just before he went to Key West. The bottom photo you seen a lot of already, is my Dad and his 1948 Chevy convertible, taken in Hawaii before he went to Key West.

I filled out a more complete character profile for my Dad based on what Lynn Palermo had in the Day 4 email for her writing challenge. There are a couple of weak areas. I have no idea on speak habits or accents and not much of an idea on physical traits like snapping finger, winking, clearing throat. I’ll have to work on that. Maybe the clearing throat thing though. Here is what I now have:

Name:
Raymond Walter Hoglund

Detailed physical description:
6 feet 4 inches tall
Lean
Strong
Tan
Athletic
Healthy
Crew-cut
Dark Reddish brown hair
Heavy eyebrows
Brown eyes
Widow peak
Shrapnel in his shoulder

Speech habits/affectations or accent:

Physical traits:
Quick smile

Ethnicity:
half Swedish, mix of northern European

Place of birth and Age:
Morton Grove, Cook County, Illinois
young 24 years old

Family History and family statues:
Single then married – had first child just before leaving Key West
3 sisters and one brother who died when Ray was a year old
Alcoholic father was a mean drunk
Not very close to his family

Educational Background:
Sailor
EOD
Diver
Dyslexic
Struggled in school
Dropped out of high school at 16
Joined the Navy a year later
Thought he was dumb
Bad handwriting & spelling

Personality traits:
Hard worker
Leadership
Fear of heights
Helping hand
Caring
All around good guy
Casual
Loves SCUBA
Good with mechanical things
Strong swimmer
Claustrophobic?
Competitive
Loves music and books
Sentimental

Sense of humor:
Dry humor
Tease
Self deprecating

Is there anything contradictory about the character?:
Not good at recognizing his own strengths and potential

Character flaws and weaknesses:
Shy with women and strangers
Self Doubt
Procrastination of fearful things
Challenge with self-expression
Gets discouraged

Character strengths:
Brave in service to others
Willing to try new things
Reliable
Dependable
Willing to learn
Willing to change
Willing to ask for help
Good team player

What does your character want (motivation)?:
To be a plank owner
To have a family of his own
To help and serve others
To learn new things
Feel loved and accepted

Writing Challenge: day 24

Posted on June 30, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

Still on day 4 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. I finished off the letters that my Dad wrote to my Mom in 1956. The story that I forgot about in this batch of letters shows my Dad’s giving nature. There was a couple from church and the husband got into trouble before they moved to Key West, forging checks. His past caught up with him and he was thrown in jail. My Dad was willing to give the wife $100 to help get him out of jail so they could run their business. But it turned out that since he actually broke probation the $100 wasn’t any help. He didn’t really know the husband. The wife was a regular at church and he knew there was a good chance that if he gave the $100 he might never see it again. I have no idea what happened to the couple but it sure shows generosity of spirit for my Dad. Plus doing it with the right attitude that it is a gift that my not be repaid.

Writing Challenge: day 23

Posted on June 27, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

My parents are in town so today I spent some time chatting with my Dad for the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. We talked about his character and values and if they have changed since he was in his 20’s. It was a time of transition for him, I think. He was gaining confidence after being away from a negative home life for several years. He had completed his GED a couple of years before but had failed a test of some kind for a college freshman equivalency. Not sure I understand that. I learned that he and the two other single instructors at the school lived in the barracks with students but in a different area. They felt like brothers to him. His only brother died when he was a year old. These men where older than my Dad and I think they might have been mentors but they certainly where more than just co-workers. One of them died a couple of years later in a drowning accident. He is still bothered by the explanation of what happened to him.

I mentioned to him about the running story I shared yesterday and he remembered a different one where a civilian who was watching my Dad run laps around a block or something decided that he must be tired so he started running with him thinking he would be able to beat him. But he didn’t. My Dad stayed a head of him the whole time. I’m thinking that maybe my competitive side was inherited from my Dad. I didn’t know this about him.

My short-term goal is to start working on a story and try to get a handle on they style of writing that will work for me and for this project. My Dad remembered that a student shared a story in the Underwater Swimmers School newsletter a few years ago about my Dad. He is going to find that. With a short story in good shape we will send it to the UWSS newsletter along with a request for students and instructors memories of my Dad. I don’t think he has a very good understanding of how others viewed him. A few stories could really help me to have a better understanding of his character.

Writing Challenge: day 22

Posted on June 26, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

I didn’t do well on my goal of following the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. I got no writing done at all. Just one of those days, I guess. I did spend a couple of hours listening to “The Glass Castle” by Jeannette Walls. That counts at least some because it is a memoir of Jeannette’s family. I really amazing book. I’m almost finished. If you haven’t read it, I highly recommend it. If I can handle my Dad’s history with half the grace the Jeannette does, it will be miraculous.

Writing Challenge: day 21

Posted on June 25, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

My Dad with his first car in 1954

Today was more of the same from yesterday. I’m still working on Day 4 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. I’m about two-thirds of the way through his letters from 1956. I found a few passages in letters that I think will work well in the history. Here is one I really enjoyed.

Hey, let me tell you how I fixed a couple of guys here. Anyway, Friday I checked in and went to work, and these two guys kept bragging about the good time they had made running a one-mile course. And they had been running it every day so they were in condition to do it. So I said let’s go out at noon time and run it for fun. They kept riding me about how they would slow down and not run too fast for me. So I just said to myself I will just show these two birds who will have to slow down. Anyhow, I ran them into the ground and best them both by several hundred yards. No more remarks from them then it was my turn to give them a bad time.

Here are a few things that I gleaned from today’s reading:

friends make life fun
being busy helps pass the time
he had the same pair of loafers for 5 years
he likes to buy and listen to records
likes miniature rose better than full size roses
called is car “old junk” it was built in 1948
embarrassed about his childhood nickname
reliable
responsible
realistic
private
respects others
caring
helpful
service minded
needs some solitude
likes cold milk
desires self-improvement and goal oriented
knows his weaknesses
his friends tease him too
thought of himself as “just a sailor”
protective
competitive
athletic
confidence in teamwork
learns from experience
not very close to his family
honest

Writing Challenge: day 20

Posted on June 24, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

My Dad with his first car in 1954

Trying to get back on track with daily writing after my vacation. I’m still working on Day 4 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge, with developing the character of my Dad. While driving this past weekend, it occurred to me that reading my Dad’s letters during his time at Key West might help show more of his character. So that is what I worked on today. I made some notes and copied sections out and put them into Scrivener for future reference. No major revelations in my reading so far. After all, I’m the one who transcribed these letters several years ago. But it gives me more confidence in my perceptions of my Dad and the kind of person he was in 1856. Here are my notes from today’s reading:

gratitude
lonely
longing for a family of his own
tender-hearted
kind
bashful
self-doubt in social situations
didn’t like Navy housing
looking for new experiences
love of music
frugal and willing to sacrifice for financial reasons
lack of confidence in social situations
reader
good imagination
hopeful
sense of humor
tease
willing to ask others for information
plans ahead
humble
challenges with expressing himself
enjoyed complements
likes to dance
bashful with strangers
bothered by things that go wrong
visual teacher
kind-hearted
wants to help others who are lonely
empathy
others saw his worth
bad handwriting
man of faith
observer
goal setter
self deprecating

Writing Challenge: day 19

Posted on June 13, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

My Dad with his first car in 1954

Now I’m working on Day 4 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. Day 4’s email is about “Creating Authentic Ancestors” or character development. I learned I need to get to know my Dad better and the kind of person he was before I came around. They are coming down for Father’s Day so I can ask him some more questions, but I thought I’d see what kind of list I could come up with today. I’m not sure what he would think of this list. I think I’ll ask him to make a list of his own to describe himself when he was 24.

Description:

24 years old

6 feet 4 inches tall

Lean

Strong

Tan

Crew-cut

Sailor for 8 years

Explosive Ordnance Disposal

Diver

Dark Reddish brown hair

Hard worker

Leadership (don’t ask someone to do something you aren’t willing to do)

Fear of heights

Heavy eyebrows

Brown eyes

Quick smile

Helping hand

Caring

All around good guy

Healthy

Shrapnel in his shoulder

Loves SCUBA

Claustrophobic?

High school drop out

Alcoholic father (a mean drunk)

Shy with women

Brave in service to others

Willing to try new things

Good with mechanical things

Strong swimmer

Reliable

Dependable

Casual

Dry humor

Tease

Self deprecating

Athletic

Willing to learn

Willing to change

Dyslexic

Struggled in school

Thought he was dumb

Writing Challenge: day 18

Posted on June 12, 2014 by tellingfamilytales

My Dad with his first car in 1954

I finally got most of an hour in on my writing goal. Leaving it for this late in the day is not a good plan. I need to make it higher on my list, right after weeding and watering the garden. I’ve progressed on to Day 3 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. Day 3’s email was written by a guest author Linda Gartz. She focused on how to get the first draft written. There is no one right way but gave some ideas of some possible approaches.

create an outline
you can start before you know exactly what the story is about
write unself-consciously
add footnotes to your first draft
use your own voice
start with a vivid personal event
write as you research

So I decided that I better just jump in and start writing. I thought I’d try writing as me talking about my Dad. So, trying to be unself-conscious about my writing here is what I wrote:

It is hard for me to imagine driving from coast to coast all alone at 24. I drove from Brooklyn, New York to Provo, Utah by myself (other than our 100 lbs. Dog) when I was almost twice that age and my parents weren’t very comfortable with it. But my dad did it and talking to him it doesn’t seem like it was that big of a deal. I hope that I can get details from him and memories of what it was like in 1954. How many days did it take. I know it was before they started the interstate project so all the roads must have been little two lane roads. I wonder how fast he drove. It certainly wasn’t 75 miles an hour. He was driving his first car, purchased in Hawaii, a dark green Chevrolet convertible that at least later he and my mom referred to as the bug. But not the Volkswagen Bug that is commonly referred to with that nick name. Ray was young and single and returning to Key West, the place he started his Navy career in 1947. Because he enjoyed the town when the opportunity came to return he put in for it. He was also drawn by the opportunity to be a Plank Owner at the first Navy School to teach underwater swimming with SCUBA. Up to this point there was no formal training in the use of SCUBA for Navy personnel. They just figured it out or went to the manufacturer for training. Ray had just such an opportunity in 1952 with a Navy assigned trip to US Divers. I’m sure this training helped him to qualify for his dream assignment in Key West.

The opportunity presented itself in the form of a letter sent out to by the Navy in the spring of 1954. Ray’s tour of duty in Hawaii was almost up and the opportunity sounded interesting plus he good buddy Demofonte was also interested in going. So the two of them applied and they were accepted. The next step was instructor training school in San Diego, California. For four weeks the learned the art of teaching in the general sense. Not how to teach underwater swimming but how to teach anything with a hands on kind of approach. One of the assignments was to teach the other students something. Ray learned a skill that has used the rest of his life from one of the other students presentation. He learned how to tie a tie. To this day it is the only tie tying knot that he knows more than 50 years later. I wonder if that student has any idea was an impact that assignment had on my dad. I had no idea that was where he learned to tie a tie. I don’t know much else about instructor school yet. I hope to find out more soon.

After successfully completing instructor school, Ray had a month of leave. Remarkable his parent now lived not far away and Ray spent the month of August with them. I wonder if his mom was as worried about his cross-country adventure as my mom was about mine? I wonder what he did with his time. I can imagine that he probably did odd jobs around the house. My dad has never been one to sit around and do nothing. I can’t imagine him not finding something productive to keep himself busy. But maybe that was something that he learned later in life.