Writing Challenge: day 18

Hawaii 1954

My Dad with his first car in 1954

I finally got most of an hour in on my writing goal. Leaving it for this late in the day is not a good plan. I need to make it higher on my list, right after weeding and watering the garden. I’ve progressed on to Day 3 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. Day 3’s email was written by a guest author Linda Gartz. She focused on how to get the first draft written. There is no one right way but gave some ideas of some possible approaches.

  • create an outline
  • you can start before you know exactly what the story is about
  • write unself-consciously
  • add footnotes to your first draft
  • use your own voice
  • start with a vivid personal event
  • write as you research

So I decided that I better just jump in and start writing. I thought I’d try writing as me talking about my Dad. So, trying to be unself-conscious about my writing here is what I wrote:

It is hard for me to imagine driving from coast to coast all alone at 24. I drove from Brooklyn, New York to Provo, Utah by myself (other than our 100 lbs. Dog) when I was almost twice that age and my parents weren’t very comfortable with it. But my dad did it and talking to him it doesn’t seem like it was that big of a deal. I hope that I can get details from him and memories of what it was like in 1954. How many days did it take. I know it was before they started the interstate project so all the roads must have been little two lane roads. I wonder how fast he drove. It certainly wasn’t 75 miles an hour. He was driving his first car, purchased in Hawaii, a dark green Chevrolet convertible that at least later he and my mom referred to as the bug. But not the Volkswagen Bug that is commonly referred to with that nick name. Ray was young and single and returning to Key West, the place he started his Navy career in 1947. Because he enjoyed the town when the opportunity came to return he put in for it. He was also drawn by the opportunity to be a Plank Owner at the first Navy School to teach underwater swimming with SCUBA. Up to this point there was no formal training in the use of SCUBA for Navy personnel. They just figured it out or went to the manufacturer for training. Ray had just such an opportunity in 1952 with a Navy assigned trip to US Divers. I’m sure this training helped him to qualify for his dream assignment in Key West.

The opportunity presented itself in the form of a letter sent out to by the Navy in the spring of 1954. Ray’s tour of duty in Hawaii was almost up and the opportunity sounded interesting plus he good buddy Demofonte was also interested in going. So the two of them applied and they were accepted. The next step was instructor training school in San Diego, California. For four weeks the learned the art of teaching in the general sense. Not how to teach underwater swimming but how to teach anything with a hands on kind of approach. One of the assignments was to teach the other students something. Ray learned a skill that has used the rest of his life from one of the other students presentation. He learned how to tie a tie. To this day it is the only tie tying knot that he knows more than 50 years later. I wonder if that student has any idea was an impact that assignment had on my dad. I had no idea that was where he learned to tie a tie. I don’t know much else about instructor school yet. I hope to find out more soon.

After successfully completing instructor school, Ray had a month of leave. Remarkable his parent now lived not far away and Ray spent the month of August with them. I wonder if his mom was as worried about his cross-country adventure as my mom was about mine? I wonder what he did with his time. I can imagine that he probably did odd jobs around the house. My dad has never been one to sit around and do nothing. I can’t imagine him not finding something productive to keep himself busy. But maybe that was something that he learned later in life.

 

Writing Challenge: day 17

Hawaii 1954

My Dad with his first car in 1954

Day 2 continued of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge and the focus is first lines. Lynn suggested reading first lines from some favorite books but I googled “first lines of books” and found a sight with “100 Best First Lines from Novels.” As I started reading them, I decided I would use them as inspiration and see how many first lines I could write for my book. I came up with 41. It remains to be seen if one of these will actually get used but it was an interesting exercise. If you want you can read them below.

  1. “Call me Red,” he said.
  2. The dark green bug convertible wound it’s way across the southern United States in the hot late August sun of 1954.
  3. Many years later in the face of retirement Ray Hoglund would remember his first drive from coast to coast.
  4. It was a hot summer night in August as the dark green convertible chugged it’s way across the barren landscape of Texas.
  5. I am an actual Navy Instructor, he thought. When he dropped out of high school at 16 he never imagined what his future might bring.
  6. He would never forget the first time. The freedom, the ease of movement and oh, the possibilities.
  7. He must have done something right to have the privilege of going back to Key West.
  8. The sun shone unceasingly on the dark green hood of the car, made tolerable by the advantages of a convertible.
  9. Twenty-four years of life proceeded this point when we pick up the story of Ray Hoglund. You may think you want to know how the choices of his life lead up to him driving across the country in an green convertible but that isn’t the point of this story, so we won’t go into it here.
  10. Tall, lean and tan, Ray Hoglund sat at the wheel of the dark green convertible, the wind failing to ruffle his crew-cut reddish hair.
  11. Hot sun and dry winds were the norm on the week-long journey across the southern Untied States, relieved only after nightfall, that was his favorite time to drive.
  12. “Fill her up.”
  13. The late afternoon sun made the shadow of the Chevy convertible race ahead of him on the road.
  14. 1954 was turning out to be a good year.
  15. Somewhere in west Texas in a town he hadn’t noticed the name of, Red stopped to fill up the gas tank of he green Chevy convertible.
  16. Everything changed the day the letter came. His whole future shifted down a new path.
  17. Every time he visited his parents while on leave he was glad to be going.
  18. “What is the next town?” he asked himself, as he study the map with his dark thoughtful eyes.
  19. Just another 100 miles and he would call it a day.
  20. “Can I drive myself?” he asked.
  21. This is just the way it happened, or as close as Red can remember.
  22. From the moment he took his first SCUBA dive his life changed.
  23. Twenty-four, single and making his first solo drive across the United States.
  24. To be a Plank Owner in a the US Navy Underwater Swimmers School. That was a dream come true. To be a part of it from the beginning. To help set things up right. Was it really happening?
  25. In a convoluted way all the decisions of his life had lead him to this point. From his childhood in the suburbs of Chicago to dropping out of school to join the Navy to volunteering for EOD to get off the U.S.S. Macon to the first time he put on SCUBA gear, it all came together here.
  26. There was a sailor named Raymond Walter Hoglund, Red to his friends and he was a newly certified Navy instructor on his way to Key West, Florida.
  27. Ray Hoglund was exhausted. He had driven 300 miles today and still had more to go.
  28. He took pleasure in the solitude of the long cross-country drive.
  29. Let’s pick a time to start this tale. While any point will do, let’s pick this one.
  30. In the beginning sometimes he woke to a sick feeling in his gut.
  31. He looked like a sailor with his lean body, tan skin and crew-cut hair.
  32. He loved it from the start.
  33. This is the life. If you have to move from Hawaii, then what could be better than Key West?
  34. When Ray Hoglund was in the Navy, they called him Red.
  35. In the late summer of 1954, Red found himself driving from San Diego to Key West.
  36. He was a few inches over 6 feet with tan skin and lean muscles from his time in Hawaii.
  37. From High School drop out to Navy instructor and Plank Owner. That was a nice change of scenery.
  38. Down the last few miles of road with ocean on either side of the road, the dark green convertible sped.
  39. The long straight road stretch out before and behind the little green Chevy convertible.
  40. On September 11th 1954 he rolled into town. Who knew that date in about 50 years would have a very different meaning. But today it was the beginning of a new a better opportunity.
  41. The heat of the day was reluctant to let go to the cool of the night as the miles of road slipped slowly by.

I failed at my goal yesterday. I hope to make up for it later in the week. Life got away from me. I have to keep this as a high priority in my life and not think I can always squeeze it in at the end of the day. That is too risky and yesterday I just couldn’t make it work.

Writing Challenge: day 14

Key West Outline

Key West Outline

For today’s focus on my writing challenge, I worked on fleshing out the story arc that I did a few days ago. I’m thinking of it as an outline now. All the tan-colored stuff at the bottom goes with “teaching the students.” I think I will add some connecting lines so that is clearer. I’m not sure if this should have already been done or if it is something I can wait to do later but I wanted to do it and so I just got it done. I also listened to the first chapter of “Angela’s Ashes” by Frank McCourt as part of Day 1 of the Armchair Genealogist‘s writing challenge. I need to do some more books to get a better feel for the hook and inciting incident stuff. That will probably be my main action step for tomorrow. I’ll let you know how it goes.

50 Jar Gifts: idea #18 “Anyone” Story Prompts

Anyone Story Prompts

This is the fifth in the series of story prompt jar gifts with questions geared for anyone. The idea is a set of questions in a jar that you can pull out to help anyone to remember and record some of the events from their lives. I printed it on chipboard but they could be printed on cardstock. There is a different color on each end of the question so that once you have answered it you can turn it over in the jar and keep track of which questions you haven’t answered yet. The questions are intended you spark your memory and lead you to other thoughts and memories. Let your them flow and see where they take you.

back of story prompt questions

The first sheet in the file is the back of the story prompts. This sheet is optional but it helps in keeping track of which set of story prompts the question comes from and adds more color to the jar. I start by printing four copies of the first page (full bleed if your printer has that option) and then feed these pages back into the printer to print the question pages. (You should refer to your printer manual to know the right way to feed these into your printer.)

anyone story prompt questions

The next four sheets are the questions. After printing these pages need to be cut apart by cutting the sheet in half (the long way) at 5.5″ and then every 1 1/16″ to finish cutting the questions apart. I also like to use a corner rounder on each question but that is optional. But it looks nice and will help the questions not get so dog-eared with use.

anyone story prompts question sheet

anyone story prompt questions

anyone story prompt questions

The last page has an insert for the canning jar lid (wide mouth quart or pint and a half work great) and a set of tags to tie on to the jar with simple instructions. There is a journal cover so that you can also give them a place to record the memories for sharing and future reference. Cut another piece of chipboard or heavy cardstock for the back along with some blank or lined paper for the inside. Then bind them together by your chosen method. I’m lucky enough to have a wire binding machine but you can get the journal bound at your local copy center. This sheet isn’t strictly necessary but it helps pull the gift together into a nice package.

journal cover, lid and labels

I am putting the jar and journal in a gift bag along with some treats to munch on while answering the questions to help get them started on recording their memories.jar gift logos19

Feel free to use these files for personal use and gifts. You can download pdfs here.

Questions come from those at StoryCorps.org.

50 Jar Gifts: idea #16 “Children” Story Prompts

Children’s Story Prompt Jar

This is the fourth in a series of story prompt jar gifts with questions geared for kids. The idea is a set of questions in a jar that you can pull out to help a child to remember and record some of the events from their lives. I printed it on chipboard but they could be printed on cardstock. There is a different color on each end of the question so that once you have answered it you can turn it over in the jar and keep track of which questions you haven’t answered yet. The questions are intended you spark kids memory and lead them to other thoughts and memories. Let their ideas flow and see where they take you.

back of story prompts sheet

The first sheet in the file is the back of the story prompt. This sheet is optional but it helps in keeping track of which set of story prompts the question comes from and adds more color to the jar. I start by printing four copies of the first page (full bleed if your printer has that option) and then feed these pages back into the printer to print the question pages. (You should refer to your printer manual to know the right way to feed these into your printer.)

story prompts question sheets

The next four sheets are the questions. After printing these pages need to be cut apart by cutting the sheet in half (the long way) at 5.5″ and then every 1 1/16″ to finish cutting the questions apart. I also like to use a corner rounder on each question but that is optional. Though it looks nice and will help the questions not get so dog-eared with use.

story prompts question sheets

story prompts question sheet

story prompts question sheet

The last page has an insert for the canning jar lid (wide mouth quart or pint and a half work great) and a set of tags to tie on to the jar with simple instructions. There is a journal cover so that you can also give them a place to record the memories for sharing and future reference. Cut another piece of chipboard or heavy cardstock for the back along with some blank or lined paper for the inside. Then bind them together by your chosen method. I’m lucky enough to have a wire binding machine but you can get the journal bound at your local copy center. This sheet isn’t strictly necessary but it helps pull the gift together into a nice package.

jar lid, tags and journal cover sheet

I am putting the jar and journal in a gift bag along with some treats to munch on while answering the questions to help get them started on recording their memories.jar gift logos17

Feel free to use these files for personal use and gifts. You can download pdfs here.

Questions come from those at StoryCorps.org.

50 Jar Gifts: idea #12 “Parents” Story Prompts

Parents Story Prompts

The third in the series of story prompt jar gifts with questions geared for parents. The idea is a set of questions in a jar that you can pull out to help parents to remember and record some of the events from their lives. I printed it on chipboard but they could be printed on cardstock. There is a different color on each end of the question so that once you have answered it you can turn it over in the jar and keep track of which questions you haven’t answered yet. The questions are intended you spark your memory and lead you to other thoughts and memories. Let your them flow and see where they take you.

back of story prompt sheets

The first sheet in the file is the back of the story prompt. This sheet is optional but it helps in keeping track of which set of story prompts the question comes from and adds more color to the jar. I start by printing six copies of the first page (full bleed if your printer has that option) and then feed these pages back into the printer to print the question pages. (You should refer to your printer manual to know the right way to feed these into your printer.)

Story Prompt Question Sheet

The next six sheets are the questions. After printing these pages need to be cut apart by cutting the sheet in half (the long way) at 5.5″ and then every 1 1/16″ to finish cutting the questions apart. I also like to use a corner rounder on each question but that is optional. But it looks nice and will help the questions not get so dog-eared with use.

Story Prompt Question Sheet

Story Prompt Question Sheet

Story Prompt Question Sheet

Story Prompt Question Sheet

Story Prompt Question Sheet

The last page has an insert for the canning jar lid (wide mouth quart or pint and a half work great) and a set of tags to tie on to the jar with simple instructions. There is a journal cover so that you can also give them a place to record the memories for sharing and future reference. Cut another piece of chipboard or heavy cardstock for the back along with some blank or lined paper for the inside. Then bind them together by your chosen method. I’m lucky enough to have a wire binding machine but you can get the journal bound at your local copy center. This sheet isn’t strictly necessary but it helps pull the gift together into a nice package.

Jar Lid, Tags and Journal Cover Sheet

I put the jar in a gift bag along with some treats to munch on while answering the questions to help get them started on recording their memories.jar gift logos13

Feel free to use these files for personal use and gifts. You can download pdfs here.

Questions come from those at StoryCorps.org.

Family History Writing Challenge – doors open

It is time to commit to this years Family History Writing Challenge by The Armchair Genealogist. I’m in, I signed up yesterday. I don’t know what/who I’m going to write about but I know that I want to take the challenge and see what I can do in 28 days. I’m going for the 250 words per day challenge but if your up to it you can choose 500 or 1,000 words per day. This will be an interesting experience for me. I’ve never done a writing challenge before. Anyone else up for the challenge? Sign up here.

50 Jar Gifts: idea #10 “Grandparents” Story Prompts

Grandparents Story Prompts

This is the second in a series of story prompt jar gifts with questions geared for grandparents. At first I called it Old Age prompts but decided that might be offensive to some of the grandparents on my gift list. The idea is a set of questions in a jar that you can pull out to help a grandparent to remember and record some of the events from their lives. I printed it on chipboard but they could be printed on cardstock. There is a different color on each end of the question so that once you have answered it you can turn it over in the jar and keep track of which questions you haven’t answered yet. The questions are intended you spark your memory and lead you to other thoughts and memories. Let your them flow and see where they take you.

Grandparents Story Prompts back side

The first sheet in the file is the back of the story prompt. This sheet is optional but it helps in keeping track of which set of story prompts the question comes from and adds more color to the jar. I start by printing six copies of the first page (full bleed if your printer has that option) and then feed these pages back into the printer to print the question pages. (You should refer to your printer manual to know the right way to feed these into your printer.)

Grandparents Story Prompts

The next six sheets are the questions. After printing these pages need to be cut apart by cutting the sheet in half (the long way) at 5.5″ and then every 1 1/16″ to finish cutting the questions apart. I also like to use a corner rounder on each question but that is optional. But it looks nice and will help the questions not get so dog-eared with use.

Grandparents Story Prompts

Grandparents Story Prompts

Grandparents Story Prompts

Grandparents Story Prompts

Grandparents Story Prompts

The last page has an insert for the canning jar lid (wide mouth quart or pint and a half work great) and a set of tags to tie on to the jar with simple instructions. There is a journal cover so that you can also give them a place to record the memories for sharing and future reference. Cut another piece of chipboard or heavy cardstock for the back along with some blank or lined paper for the inside. Then bind them together by your chosen method. I’m lucky enough to have a wire binding machine but you can get the journal bound at your local copy center. This sheet isn’t strictly necessary but it helps pull the gift together into a nice package.

Grandparents Story Prompts Journal cover and Jar labels

I am putting the jar and journal in a gift bag along with some treats to munch on while answering the questions to help get them started on recording their memories.jar gift logos11

Feel free to use these files for personal use and gifts. You can download pdfs here.

Questions come from those at StoryCorps.org.

50 Jar Gifts: idea #8 “Remembering” Story Prompts

Remembering Story Prompts Kit

Here is the first in a series of story prompt jar gifts. The idea is a set of questions in a jar that you can pull out to help you remember and record someone in your life who has died. I printed it on chipboard but they could be printed on cardstock. There is a different color on each end of the question so that once you have answered it you can turn it over in the jar and keep track of which questions you haven’t answered yet. The questions are intended you spark your memory and lead you to other thoughts and memories. Let your them flow and see where they take you.

printed Remembering Story Prompts kit

Story Prompts back

The first sheet in the file is the back of the story prompt. This sheet is optional but it helps in keeping track of which set of story prompts the question comes from and adds more color to the jar. I start by printing two copies of the first page (full bleed if your printer has that option) and then feed these pages back into the printer to print the question pages. (You should refer to your printer manual to know the right way to feed these into your printer.)

Story Prompt Questions

Story Prompt Questions

The next two sheets are the questions. After printing these pages need to be cut apart by cutting the sheet in half (the long way) at 5.5″ and then every 1 1/16″ to finish cutting the questions apart. I also like to use a corner rounder on each question but that is optional. But it looks nice and will help the questions not get so dog-eared with use.

Story Prompt Packaging and Journal Cover

The last page has an insert for the canning jar lid (wide mouth quart or pint and a half work great) and a set of tags to tie on to the jar with simple instructions. There is a journal cover so that you can also give them a place to record the memories for sharing and future reference. Cut another piece of chipboard or heavy cardstock for the back along with some blank or lined paper for the inside. Then bind them together by your chosen method. I’m lucky enough to have a wire binding machine but you can get the journal bound at your local copy center. This sheet isn’t strictly necessary but it helps pull the gift together into a nice package.

I am putting the jar and journal in a gift bag along with some treats to munch on while answering the questions to help get them started on recording their memories of a loved one.jar gift logos9

Feel free to use these files for personal use and gifts. You can download pdfs here.

Questions come from those at StoryCorps.org.

 

2014 Family History Writing Challenge

The Armchair Genealogist is planning her Family History Writing Challenge for 2014. At this point she is asking what our biggest writing challenges are, other than time. You can comment on her blog or on Facebook. In 2012 Lynn did 29 day writing challenge from February 1 – 29th. And it looks like she repeated the challenge in 2013. Now she is going to change-up the challenge a bit and while I don’t know what will be, I’m committing now to participate in The Family History Writing Challenge in 2014. I’ll let you know when she posts more information about the challenge but it would be awesome if everyone would seriously consider taking on this challenge.